The grades I gave the three papers I graded.

The rubric I found was out of 21 and I know trey wanted them out of 25 so I just did the conversion to make them out of 25 and rounded.

Jakub’s grade

-(3 / 3) Can you find the idea/claim/thesis?

The claim is very clear in this paper. Art is more complex than people believe and is very difficult to put a single definition to.

-(1 / 3) Any grammatical errors?

Throughout the paper there was poor sentence structure and a severe lack of articles such as A and The.

-(3 / 3) Can you target the writer’s use of Ethos/Logos/Pathos?

The author appeals to the sense of pathos simply by the topic of the paper. Art is a subject that all people can relate to and normally a person has a favorite piece of art that this paper will bring to mind.

The logos of the paper is in the argument of what is art. The paper makes a connection between the “definition” of what art is and what is considered to be art in our world.

-(2 / 3) Are there any spots in the essay that could use strengthening?

I think the paper is lacking in clear definition of what the author believes art is. The idea that art is too complex to come up with a definition left me wanting. Also the paper was difficult to get through because of the poor sentence structure and the need to add in words to make a sentence make sense.

-(3 / 3) Is the essay accessible and easy to navigate?

The paper had a clear flow and was very easily found.

-(2 / 3) Do you want to actualize any of the goals presented in the writing?

I think that after reading the paper I am less likely to use the word art as loosely as I have in the past. However I still believe what art is should be determined in the eyes of the one you is experiencing it.

-(3 / 3) Did you learn anything new? OR Do you have a new prospective on the writers topic?

I learned the 18th century meaning of art and that art has been applied to almost everything due to its loose meaning.

GRADE: 20 / 25 - Word Count - (1817)

-(3 / 3) Can you find the idea/claim/thesis?

“This paper discusses the way politics changes definitions and has changed them throughout time.” The opening paragraph clearly laid out the idea of the paper and the intentions of the author

-(3 / 3) Any grammatical errors?

-(3 / 3) Can you target the writer’s use of Ethos/Logos/Pathos?

The use of pathos in the paper was in the very first line when it spoke about the emotion that is normally brought up with the use of the word politics.

Logos was through the description of why the meaning of the word politics has changed so drastically through recent history.

Ethos was established through the use of specific example of what caused the definition to change.

-(2 / 3) Are there any spots in the essay that could use strengthening?

I think the core of the essay was very good and informative, but the paragraph where huge allowing for very little time for the ideas to sink in.

-(3 / 3) Is the essay accessible and easy to navigate?

The essay was easy to find and had a very clear flow through out.

-(3 / 3) Do you want to actualize any of the goals presented in the writing?

I feel that the paper was meant to show that politics is simply a word and if left to grow on its own will continue to cause the same emotions that it has in recent member, anger. I feel that those who are affected most by the decision made in politics should be more active in politics. Voting in ignorance is worse than not voting period.

-(3 / 3) Did you learn anything new? OR Do you have a new prospective on the writers topic?

I always thought of politics a mere show to get certain people to advance in society. This paper helped me to realize that politics is simply a tool that can be useful based upon what we the people define it as.

GRADE: 24 / 25 - Word Count - (1800)

Andrea’s paper

-(3 / 3) Can you find the idea/claim/thesis?

The thesis of the paper is that Go Green needs to be more than just a fad. “The concept of saving our planet should not be a trend, it should not be something that is positive or negative as far as fashion is concerned, its a matter of life or death.

-(3 / 3) Any grammatical errors?

There was one or two, but nothing to big. For instants the word its in the thesis needs and apostrophe between the t and the s.

-(3 / 3) Can you target the writer’s use of Ethos/Logos/Pathos?

The paper had a strong us of pathos through the use of words like matter of life or death and storms are raging. This was a very good use of pathos because it got me to be engaged in the piece and get excited about going green.

The ethos of the paper was in the quote in the beginning that spoke of not punishing the person for what they do but in stead try and change what they believe is right and word, which was a great lead into the paper. Also the ability to use scientific jargon was very important in establishing ethos because that helped show that she knew what she was talking about.

The logos is in things like if you drive a land rover, wearing a go green t-shirt isn’t going to save the planet.

These were all used very well and helped to bring the paper together.

-(2/ 3) Are there any spots in the essay that could use strengthening?

I think the paper could have used some more tying together of the facts back to the thesis. Just a simple line of and if you don’t pay attention to this the world will still suffer. And it could have used a stronger conclusion. Such as a concise paragraph tying everything back to the thesis that doesn’t introduce anything else new into the paper.

-(3 / 3) Is the essay accessible and easy to navigate?

I found the essay very easily and it had a definite flow to it that was easy to follow from the beginning.

-(3 / 3) Do you want to actualize any of the goals presented in the writing?

I found myself feeling bad about not recycling as I read the paper and it caused me to think about how much I drive and how much I myself could do to help the environment. So basically yes I want to actualize the goals presented in this paper.

-(3 / 3) Did you learn anything new? OR Do you have a new prospective on the writers topic?

I definitely have a new prospective on the topic. As I said in the prior section I found myself felling like I wasn’t doing enough to help the planet and was a cafeteria go green believer.

GRADE: 24/ 25 - Word Count - (1385)